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A crime of a rhyme

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English Poetry

Will you fail your cloudy sky,
And come with me to the creek?
And if I forego a thousand tricks,
Will you be so kind as to speak?

Black and white and grey have been
A disciplined life of dull,
The colours of the sounds you make,
Strike the null in my deep lull.

In thousand crimes of over-rhymes
I here proclaim my pride.
If I call to you, “Let’s go back home!“,
Will you also fail the tide?

8 Comments

  1. Gion Gion says:

    Saurabh,
    something wrong with the stars. Went to click on 5 but 2 popped up.
    One of the best of your posts that I’ve read so far.
    I like the way you use the water cycle and contrast the 2 neutrals and their prodigy with “The colours of the sounds you make,”. The flowing, gushing, pulsing, burbling spoken word.
    “In thousand crimes of over-rhymes
    I here proclaim my pride.” – this is the budding poet 🙂
    Fergus
    May I suggest 2 corrections as follows?
    (Will you be so kind as to speak?)
    (If I call to you, “Let’s go back home!“,)

    • saurabh says:

      @Gion Gion,
      Everytime I read the kind as to speak line, I knew something was wrong but for some absent mindedness, could not place a finger on it. Thanks. The second one, I never noticed. Thanks for that, as well.

      Thank you, moreover for the kind appreciation.
      I must confess, the colours of the sounds is from Albert Hoffman’s description of the accidental LSD consumption. (“I could see sounds and hear colours”, he said)

  2. Parespeare says:

    a gem of a poem, Saurabh
    liked it

  3. medhini says:

    A poem of profound substance,Sourabh.

  4. dhananjay says:

    very nice….loved all the lines but have actually lived the first 4 lines !! on another topic..read your LSD comment above and transported me to the song Purple Haze by Jimi Hendrix which I feel is the best song about LSD

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