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The liquid invite(rubaiyat)

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English Poetry

The liquid invite

In your golden words forthright

The smoldering desire in your heart

Makes my heart warm in candle light

 

With the languid beats of Mozart

All emotions fall apart

Slumbering passions soothed

Sweet heart don’t stand so far apart……

 

Standing  silken clothed

With the softest of robes adorned

Senses lulled by the musical

Eyes lost  in dreams ; self-imposed…………….

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~MaliniKadir

 

 

7 Comments

  1. Gion Gion says:

    Hema,
    the word “flow” is often employed in comments on this site – how apt it is hear. The shifting, alluring fluidity of words, smoke, music, light, silk – all leading to the realization of the ephemeral nature of the “self imposed” “dream”… to the minor chords of lamentation,
    Fergus

  2. Hi Hema,
    A very nice love poem . Spun with tautness. It runs the whole gamut of emotions from acceptance to acknowledgement . The last line confuses ,suggest you remove ‘have’ . make it ‘lost in dreams , self imposed.’
    sarala.

  3. Vishvnand says:

    Liked the poem very much.
    Emotions beautifully portrayed in words
    hearty commends

  4. dhananjay says:

    lovely flow…liked it immensely !!!

  5. thank you…..Words are as if it were a hubby’s thoughts into words….poetic transformed……does it sound good this work of art?

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