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Dying Flower..

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English Poetry


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Roads and paths are made for us to walk on,
But to choose the right one is our decision.
Like a bee has to decide on which flower to loiter on,
But rather a bloom than a dying flower position.
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Life is full of mistakes and forgiveness,
Friends should be such who’ll always stay with you,
In the times of light or bad times of darkness,
Even like a flower being fresh yellow or dying blue.
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To make a wish on a shooting star may sound stupid,
Even foolishness is there in our life.
We are such beautiful and gifted creatures, at the same time courageous and timid.
Wishes out of shooting stars give some hope at times of swords and knives.
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Without love, we are all like dying flowers,
Silent, hopeless; with no wish and light.
But love and friendship is like unexpected water,
Which quenches the thirst of being alive and brings everything from Rong To Right..

8 Comments

  1. Gion Gion says:

    Eric,
    I think I’ll stay clear of your flower garden :)
    Very thoughtful and a good use of imagery that is accessible to a wide variety of experience. A few changes suggested in brackets,
    Fergus
    “Like a bee has to decide on which flower to ponder(loiter) on,
    But rather (a) bloom than a dying flower position.
    …………
    To make a wish on a shooting star may sound stupid,
    Even foolishness is there in our life.
    …………
    Which quenches the thirst of being alive and brings everything from Rong(Wrong) To Right..”

    • Eric says:

      @Gion Gion, Fergus bro,
      As per your suggestions I have made the changes, actually when I wrote this my mind was full of miscellaneous thoughts so I couldn’t focus properly. And secondly as for the ‘Wrong’ I prefer to write ‘Rong’ due to some personal reasons (Please don’t mind), as my next poem shall be entirely based on ‘Rong’..
      Eric.

  2. Vishvnand says:

    A beautiful poem of meaning & lovely essence
    The poem’s muse & deliberation deserve profound admiration
    Liked the poem immensely may be an understatement.
    Hearty Commends
    I can see Rong is not wrong but may be right here.

  3. shanti says:

    Full of wisdom and guidance. Ignore the negative comments. We all know how to correct someone else.
    Rong or wrong is to test someone’s pettiness.

    • Gion Gion says:

      @shanti,
      Shanti,
      I think that you are mistaken to speak of negative comments and pettiness. I have reviewed the comments and responses and see no cause for your assertion,
      Fergus

  4. Caro says:

    So beautiful

    ”Without love, we are all like dying flowers,
    Silent, hopeless; with no wish and light.
    But love and friendship is like unexpected water,
    Which quenches the thirst of being alive and brings everything from Rong To Right..”

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