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This thing called Love

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Apr 2011 Contest, English Poetry

There i was trying my best at fishing
Along came a girl, i never thought i would be missing
I told myself not again, its time to run
It’s regret that keeps reeling in, i wish i had a gun
I went in, knowing of all the consequences and risks
But i couldn’t see anything beyond the beauty of her mist

My fishing count was going to eight from seven
But the time we spent together was way better then heaven
The glow of her face lit up the smile on mine
I should have thought i would end up with many glasses of wine
Just when i considered retirement from fishing again
I now wish for the rain so my eyes let go off tihs pain

Second straight time the loss is heavy
Guilt and regret followed, with emptiness as its special gravy
I want to take U turn on a very steep curve
I should have kept myself away from this thing called LOVE

4 Comments

  1. shambhavi says:

    super liked it…… 🙂

  2. Gion Gion says:

    Vishvesh,
    welcome to p4poetry.
    A good debut.
    “The glow of her face lit up the smile on mine
    I should have thought i would end up with many glasses of wine
    ………………………….
    I now wish for the rain so my eyes let go off tihs pain
    ………………………………
    Guilt and regret followed, with emptiness as its special gravy” – plenty of good imagery in this poem, well expressed feelings.
    Just a couple of corrections – verse 2, line 2 “then” change to than.
    Verse 2, line 6 “tihs” change to this.

  3. Vizvez says:

    Hey Gion Gion..thanks man..i have just started with poetry..aahh…i hate it when someone points out my spelling or grammer mistakes..i am usually very good..

    but thanks..you always learn from your mistakes.. 😉

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