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English Poetry

When you say
You are not with me
You are not with you
You have locked your heart
And lost the keys

I cry
Cry as i cant make you happy
Cry as i have failed
Cry as s i failed to make you forget
What has happened yesterday

What is to me dear?
I could be just ok
I will just format everytrhing
As i know the art to live
But what will be your destiny
If u not smile today
I am afraid you will never do that tomorrow

So just come with me
& i will lead u to the heaven
Where love never ends
& time never runs
You and me
Will be happy

2 Comments

  1. Vishvnand says:

    Good poem.
    Liked it

    “If u not smile today” should be “If you do not smile today” or “If you are not smiling today”

  2. Gion Gion says:

    Ajay,this has potential to shine, I liked reading it.
    As Vishvnand indicates – replace the txt with standard English, plus change “&” to and. I think his second suggestion would work best with this poem.
    Some good imagery –
    the well known one in the first verse – nicely worded.
    This modern one is very good, especially given the means of publishing this poem –
    “I could be just ok
    I will just format everytrhing” – (everything). The spell-checker is a valuable tool.
    Gion

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