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Entitled.

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Child innocent draws pictures in the sand,
Unfettered his imagination free to run,
Signs his name mis-spelled but with a flourish!

Man with a gold pen marks a line on a map,
His acknowledged certainty backed by a gun,
Condemns himself and warrants blood to gush.

Child cries when in distress, hunger or pain,
Sure in his instinctive expectation,
Of the assistance that is his rightful due.

Man cries out when he cannot bear the stress,
He buckles under the sudden realization,
That his life-line has frayed or been cut through.

Child skips and runs across the roughest ground,
He makes a playing-field where there is no grass,
His teams growing to include every kid.

Man struts and poses on his own stage,
Skilled at creating barriers of glass,
So of all the others he may be rid.

11 Comments

  1. ULHAS says:

    Good poem sir, nice examples……………

    Loved the poem…..Stars = 5

  2. Vishvnand says:

    Deeply meaningful. Liked immensely
    What most things everyone should naturally & justifiably be entitled to are the things which in this present civilized world, continuously under attack to be snatched away from them.

    • Gion Gion says:

      @Vishvnand,
      Vishvnand,
      thanks for your understanding.
      Verse 3 & 4 try to reflect responsibility for caring. The life-line image being how so many lives are shattered by recent loss of jobs, saving and pensions.
      This poem is a somewhat simplistic view of extremes of human existence but let them act as mirrors to focus on the broad centre of what often does happen.
      regards,
      Fergus

  3. U.M.Sahai says:

    Good comparison between child and man’s behaviour.

  4. purabi says:

    Gion,
    I had always wanted to write poetry on these lines, following this style.but somehow, have fallen short of words.
    the gravity of life well splashed. ruminating on this line:
    ‘His acknowledged certainty backed by a gun,”
    Lovely, lovely…

    • Gion Gion says:

      @purabi,
      Purabi,
      I had in mind the Radcliffe Line and all the other lines that have been drawn across so many pieces of paper over the years.
      The line you quote refers both the exercise of power and the assumption of power by new vested interests.
      The final line of the verse suggests that rarely is the draughtsman’s reputation enhanced and that he signs the metaphorical and actual death sentence of communities, families and individuals through which his line of ink passes.
      I am glad for your appreciation of this poem,
      Gion

  5. rachana says:

    simply beautiful! I read it twice:)

    • Gion Gion says:

      @rachana,
      Thank you Rachana,
      glad you like it.
      The name “Entitled” is a play on meaning – everyone is born with a just entitlement to a care in this life but as child transforms to man some presume to greater entitlement or become blinded to their responsibility or the consequences of their actions by additional entitlements bestowed on them,
      Gion

  6. renu rakheja says:

    So true and so sad….

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