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TWO STATES (STRREV(AMILED))
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Loading ...i think every night, what holds me so tight.
in a place so strange and where no one is mine
…………………….
#include<pain>
full of creatures, painted in black
walking after year nine , straight away from coal mine.
full of murmurs that surpass me, cant understand
pinches my ears and clinches my fears.
i think every night, what holds me so tight.
in a place so strange and where no one is mine
……………….
#include<sorrows>
from dusk to dawn, rice is on and on
i forgot to eat since i am here
my griefs, my pathos,my ordeal all are at pinnacle
i understand now if it does, than hell exist here.
i think every night, what holds me so tight.
in a place so strange and where no one is mine
………………..
#include<you you & you>
yes its you………………!!!!!!
i think every night, why i wake up so bright.
in a place so new, where no one is mine
………….
#include<joy>
i dream no future, i dream no past
the time has stopped, just with your glance.
new world is born when you wink your eyes
what will these creatures do , when i dream just you.
i think every night, why i wake up so bright.
in a place so new, where no one is mine
……………..
#include<fantasy>
i hear no murmurs, i hear no voice
your laugh echos loud, louder than any noice.
you are in my breath, you are in my heart
you are in my eyes…… omnipresence
i think every night, why i wake up so bright.
in a place so new, where no one is mine
……………
#include<love>
pains are gone like giggle after frown
i smile and i walk, i smile and i talk,
i smile and i eat , i smile and i sleep
enclosed in black magic sealed with your eyes
i wish to be here forever devine.
#include<someone special>
………………………
i think every night, why i wake up so bright.
in a place so new, where now every one is mine
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so………………..
its ur 2 stats ………….
which seems
to b lik me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
bt I must say to u ……………………
HEADS OFFFFFFFFFF
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:11 pm
@ashish, yaar senti mat ho!!
picture to abhi baaki hai mere dost ###
Suraj,
loved these lines
” i smile and i walk, i smile and i talk,
i smile and i eat , i smile and i sleep
enclosed in black magic sealed with your eyes”.
very good first post, keep it up!
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:10 pm
@Ray, thnx a lot sir!!
it really boosts my confidence when i get comment from poet of such callibre.
fabulous……….fantastic…………….mind-blowing!!!!!!!!!!!!
phod diya be………
waise kiske prakop me ye sab kar raha hai…………..
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:09 pm
@vikas, haha!! bas yaar samaj jao!
hehe!! imagination hai yaar koi prakop shakop nahin ##
LIKE UR FLOWERLY LANGUAGE……QUITE AMAZED WITH THE WAY U PLAYED WITH WORDS 
AWESOME WORK ……DYING TO READ MORE…
EVERYWORD IS SO NICELY EMBEDDED…
shikaytein shilwaton ko sahilon ke darmiyan panah ki chah mein aksar pukarati hain …ki…ye samandar teri gahrai ko humne kyun na jana….
शिकायतें सिलवटों को साहिलों ke darmiyan अक्सर अपनी उम्मीदों ke सेहर में रेत की पलीन्दो में येही पुकारिती हैं …कि ये समंदर हमने तेरी गहराई को क्यूँ न जाना ………..//…………extreamly great…..
Kasam khuda ki kya imagination hai aap ki
sirjee
nayi duniya bn jati hai tumhari ek palak jhapak se
wah!
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:07 pm
@Nirman, thnx but plzz sirjee mat boliye… mai kaafi chota hun!
wats dis suru!!!!!!!!!!
i cnt evn imagin dat i m a rummet of sch a g8 poet….
wat a talent yaar……….
its amazng to thnk dat u hv poured all d sea water (problms u r facng) withn a glass (poem)…….
fantastikkk yaar…….
:::::::::::::::waiting 4 ur next blast::::::::::::::::::
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:06 pm
@Abhishek Gaur, thanx abhi!!
yaar tuu ne to commnt mai bhi poetry kar di 2 2 gud!!
Aisa karega matlab…… matlab poori phoda phaadi ek saath….yeah..raulla ladke kaa… bhaai bada aaadmi banke bhool mat jaana.. hehe…awesome work yaar… keeeep oin man..
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:05 pm
@koolajay, hahaha!!!
bilkul nahi bhoolunga … tujhe kaise bhool sakta hun yaar!!
kya poet hai………………………..
kya kavita hai………………….
kya likhta hai………….
kya lines hai………………….
kya ………..hai
phod diya bande ne….bas maccha diya…
ulti yaar….tu theek to hai na….
baas i don’t hv words 2 admire u…grt job…
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:04 pm
@Mohit, haan bhai ekdum mast hu..!
aur rahin baat phoda phadi ki to vo to apan humesha he machate hai…
kyun!!
ahem ahem…still the words r in my throat..got stuck..u knw..
samaj nhi aa rha ki teri tareef karu ya gaali du…faaltu me mera ek aur shauk paida kar diya….
speechless..bhai agli baari likhne se pahle bata diyo…
v get prepare…nhi kya pata hum mar-var jaye…
this is for some one you love i think.
u know if she reads this than ……
definetly she will come before u flying without wings
because your words are wings of her.
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:03 pm
@balakrishna, wow!! this is really lovely but yaar dats not true I M NOT IN LOVE…
my beloved friend,
i m amazed by your creativity
i hope you keep writing more and more.
keeep it up.
i m still recovering… seriously speaking when u said 2 read d poem…i expected an ameturish work created bcoz of boredom…but this goes def beyond boredom…way beyond..
gr8 poem…
lover boy has grown up
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 7:59 pm
@Ankit Khaitan, haan yaar ab mai sahin mai kaafi bada ho gaya hu…
i m stunned by reading last few lines and complete poem was hearty.
one thing is of sure your someone special is the luckiest girl to have so romantic lover.
i will make my boy friend read this poem 10 times.
gr8 job
suraj
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 7:58 pm
@nidhi, hey nidhi dis is to tell u dat i m single and ready to mingle…. hehe!!
thnx a lot
this is an amazing poem which is a expression of problems in a comical way and romance in a serious way which are connected beautifully!!!!!!!
SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 7:58 pm
@sravya, thnx sravs….
u got the real essence of my poem…!!
“aare suraj e sab kya poem-oaem likhat hai. kuch hamre upar poem-oaem bhi likha na ”
*/kuch apne aur tamare chhamiya ke bare me bhi likha na yar/*
wah bhai kya baat hai aaj tune bta diya tu mera dost hai na
ab jab dubara likhne ko bolu to yeh mat kehna ki roooo diye na
That was an awesome piece. loved these lines
“i dream no future, i dream no past
the time has stopped, just with your glance.
new world is born when you wink your eyes”
I hope you are having a great time in college. Btw I am your di’s friend
abe tu to chhupa rustam nikla
salle mere upper bhi kuchh likha kar yaar
tu to janta hi hai mAIN kitna odd hun
bas continue kar
my best wishes with you
all the best for your future
SURAJ Reply:
January 26th, 2010 at 7:52 pm
@vishwajeet kumar, thnx bro for your wishes ……..i will continue ……..!!!
yaar but i m 2 small poet to write about such gr8 people like u!!
hehe!!
nice work suraj, i can totally relate with this poem’s setting.
ps: poems in programing language? quite a novel idea
SURAJ Reply:
March 2nd, 2010 at 8:10 pm
@nandita,
wow !!!
kool some one really undrstud my creativity.
and i xpected also as u r frm same stream!!!
“tujhe SURAJ kahun ya chanda…??
tujhe deep kahun ya taara..??
tera naam karunga roshan, jag me mera raj dulara..”
simply mind blowing stuff..
is SURAJ se Shayari bhi sun na chahta hun…
Suraj Reply:
March 4th, 2010 at 3:54 pm
@M.K.CHATURVEDI,
thnk u …. Thnk u….
Bilkul nxt post will be full of shayaries.
“tujhe SURAJ kahun ya chanda,..?
tujhe deep kahun ya taara…?
tera naam hoga roshan, jag me mera raj dulara…!!!”
is SURAJ se Shayari bhi sun na hai ..
simply mind blowing stuff..
keep it going..
hi..
this is suraj chawda....
a young, dynamic and innovative writer!!!!
poetry for me was hobby till years back but slowly it turned to passion and now
i wish to lift this passion to a complete new level......
i write not for teaching,not for telling but to display the picture of todays youth.
i wish you would enjoy this.....
visit me at..... http://www.orkut.co.in/Main#Home?rl=t
fantastic job yaar………
tu tho yaar apne dil ko kaagaz par utar diya..
maan gaye ustaad…….
i think u r the player of words………
tumne apni sari dard ,jajbaat poem me utaar di hai
bas ab waiting for your next one…
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SURAJ Reply:
January 24th, 2010 at 8:12 pm
@nitesh, koi nahin cmmng very soon!
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