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A Blanket Holiday
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Stick out my head from my bed,
its not morning, the sun’s delayed
or its dark, it’s the moon instead.
Under the blanket, drowned in a sheet
let me go back, slipped in it
a few more hours, a few more dreams, let me cheat.
Wearing days brought me no myself,
my time was paid, and tiredness had no help,
if not, be it, the bed at least be of self.
A few moments to live a little pleasant, a little lazy
my blanket and me, took away, a tour as cozy
holidays – my dreams, those destinations easy.
>>> An Interpretation of Holidays
24 Comments
Ulhas, read it on my phone so laynut a soblem. Read it 3/4 tines, rhyming very clever and language very subtle. The idea of lazing in bed is well expressed. How we ever dream? Not lazy at all! Enjoyed very much. Cant rate on my phone, will do later
Ulhasji!!!!
A brilliant write and cleverly explains the essence of holiday so well.
Will rate when I log in. Definitely 5 stars…
A lazy cozy morning of a holiday & its profound uniqueness beautifully captured & shared. Liked the poem immensely
“if not, be it, the bed at least be of self.”…beautiful
Dear Poets
Thanks for reading this poem and commenting. I really appreciate you spending time on the poem.
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Ulhas Kavle
loved the closing lines to the poem
the poem has a lot of finesse
always enjoy reading your poems Ulhasji
ULHAS Reply:
June 4th, 2009 at 11:44 am
Thanks a lot……your comment counts
What a dream…! After the hectic life that I lead, I swear, this is the answer to all prayers!! What bliss, lazing, lazing,, nothing else! 
Loved your interpretation of a holiday.
ULHAS Reply:
June 4th, 2009 at 11:45 am
Lazy….Lazy……………………Thanks a lot
Dear Ulhas, It seems to me as if you also dreamt of this poem and penned
it when awakened. Very nicely narrated the real holiday leisureliness, though
it may or may not be quite personal ! Please go ahead with such laconic
juvenilias retrospecting your gap since 31st ultimo ! a.k. goswami.
ULHAS Reply:
June 6th, 2009 at 2:17 pm
Thanks sir…………Your comments matter to me…………..
Ps: My latest poem “omnium gatherum” dated 5th instant is there for the
perusal of all the dear witty critics/commentators, please !
a.k. goswami.
Sorry I’m late!
HEy Ulhas. Refreshing stuff, this. Not changed, but your writing style has evolved A LOT. Clever clever rhyming. I’ll be honest, some of your earlier poems had some forced rhymes. Not even one here. Beautiful. And the way you portrayed it, I could actually feel the warmth of the sheet. Bliss.
(+) – Exceptional writing style
(-) – You deserve it. None in particular.
ULHAS Reply:
June 9th, 2009 at 7:35 am
Sir, thanks…………that means…………….dil pe pathhar rakhke apne comments kiye thee………:) just kidding sir…………..
Sometimes to make the flow……flow smooth, we have to force rhymings…even if they are not of your choice…
Thank you again sir……
PS: To make the title of my poem referred to as “omnium gatherum” Anglice,
I have changed the title to be “HETEROGENEITY” hence forward, please
note. a.k. goswami.
May be poetry is something you write on topics you feel from within, but I love writing something which doesnt come from within and always contradict myself everytime. I love playing with words and make a nice Jigsaw out of them.
P4Poetry is a beautiful place and great for poets who always needed a place where they can showcase their work. Enjoy Poetry!!!
Dear All,
Please spend some time and comment.
Thanks in Advance.
Regards
Ulhas Kavle
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