Inside my love,Die !!
(2 votes, average: 4.50 out of 5, rated)
Loading ...A deep dark night
Clutching like a parasite
Strange dark woods
Throwing its hoods
Refusing to let go
Howling winds blow
Threatening whirlpools
Demons rule
Tentacles and vines
circle and entwine
your dark mind
Raging tempest
Anguished quest
Died a thousand deaths
Trying to set love on the breath
Deep cloud cover
O seething lover
Dont burn so bright
In your own light
Slide out from the side
Do it now
Before you die
Run, escape
Before you get raped
By your own mind
Thats made you blind
With its simmering steam
can hear your soul scream
Soar up to the sky
Along the length of my thigh
Wings of your fancy and fly
Up, up, high, high
Join me inside
Inside my love, Die…..
9 Comments
i never thought romance cud be portrayed in such a dark-way…..n very effectively too…. gave me goosebumps…. the sensuality as always is simply beautiful……
Superb, you derserve a 5 star, A superb flow with rhyming, thats what I love…..
The strength is rhyming, not just simple rhyming, I will call it superb rhyming,
The weakness is you took a lot of time to convey your thoughts, like times of india puts million of paragraphs to convey something simple or straight, but the sequence of words and lines make it a wordsworth poem……
I simply loved to read the lines and the rhyming and the flow, forget the topic, when you painted lines such superbly…..
Every words is systematically put, I just loved it………
Stars = Million
a deep intense writing…metaphors, imagery packed beautiful lines.there was an element of distress your poem mirrored but not complete hopelessness.the poetry ends with a word ‘die’ that is generally associated with ‘end’,but here it is with a twist: “dieing in love”….thats the beauty of the poetry…
BEAUTY!
I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
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wow…….:)
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