The Vampire
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Loading ...Suspended by his wrath
A mind that is fraught
With delusions about his genius
And a sea of dissatisfaction
Yearning to reach a bliss
Hanging by his dark desires
Burning in his blazing fire
The Vampire lurks…..
Led by a belief
That he will get his release
Riding on her dreams
As he spots her, his inner eye gleams
He gets a whiff of the expanded soul
And he wants ALL of it to make him whole
The light that will glorify him
The Vampire strikes…..
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Metaphorically meaningful and very well composed. Lurks and strikes are very well juxtaposed with meaningful support.
Loved it….
Was it a thud!well i SAW his eyes,his blooded mouth!there is a vampire in all of us … and the fear too!!!
‘And he wants ALL of it to make him whole’..the desire to be complete remains incomplete..hapless man know not this!
thank you again for some extraordinary lines and the wrath wrapped in this art called poetry.
Ah what a Vampire story!!! Its sad that we all have vampires lurking inside us at one time or another…
With delusions about his genius
And a sea of dissatisfaction
What a wonderful composition! That each one of us have demons inside is so well portrayed. Loved it!
Renu,
I took time to read this again, very good.
I liked the way you split it into just 2 verses.
That increased the impact of intent(“lurks”) driven by “dellusions” and action(“striles”) in mistaken “belief”.
Gion
I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
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Very well expressed and essayed….specially the lines…”With delusions about his genius …And a sea of dissatisfaction”
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renu rakheja Reply:
April 29th, 2009 at 10:40 am
Thanks Seema
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