The Spiderweb
(4 votes, average: 4.75 out of 5, rated)
Loading ...As his mind weaves
A spiderweb on the wall
Of his heart
I silently watch
Bemused
Admiring the intricate web
So light
Beguiling in its softness
And watch the hovering bees
Slowly becoming a prisoner
Caught in its beauty
And
The spider mind
Already moved
To a new wall
To make
Its next masterpiece
23 Comments
wow!what an intense poetry.masterstroke!
melancholy engulfed,hope never recedes.
THANK YOU!!!!!!!
renu rakheja Reply:
April 27th, 2009 at 5:40 pm
Thanks Purabi.This is a comment that every poet hopes for 
Wow! Renu absolutely brillant piece of work. I loved these lines
The spider mind
Already moved
To a new wall
To make
Its next masterpiece
The treacherous male mind and its many devious plans well etched with subtlety and finesse….
P.S. Due apologies to all the males who read my comment…
Gion Gion Reply:
May 18th, 2009 at 2:16 pm
Seema,
accepted. But you have, nevertheless, given me an insight to this poem,
Gion
loved it… liked the ease with which d wrds flow, nd subtleness with which u have dealt with the theme… truly a masterpiece….
5 stars 4 u….
renu rakheja Reply:
April 28th, 2009 at 2:26 pm
Thanks Vartika- Have you ever written in English?Would love to read if you have
vartika Reply:
April 30th, 2009 at 10:28 pm
well… the first two poems that I wrote were in english… i was in std 6th then… since then i never wrote anything…… फिर जब दुबारा कलम उठाई अभी एक दो वर्षों पहले तब वो हिंदी में चली…
though i have a poor eng vocabulary but still i will surely give it a try…
Its a good write, Something thats flown in from your hand on to paper, a quick write.
Other than having a deep meaning, the poem is free flowing set of lines.
Stars = 4
the sorrow n beauty of the poem are breath-taking……
renu rakheja Reply:
April 28th, 2009 at 2:26 pm
Thanks Apoorv- Havnt read any of yours for a loooooong time.Come on !!
aPOorV Reply:
April 30th, 2009 at 3:18 pm
yea i know.. xams on…..will get back as soon as they’re over…
What a nice way to put forth treachery in the form of sarcasm layered with poetic deviousness. Amazing way to express but can be
applied to all who has such devious minds….
LOVELY…
I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
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Wow, the art of embroiling!
Very nice write!
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renu rakheja Reply:
April 27th, 2009 at 5:40 pm
Thanks Parminder
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