NOW OR NEVER!!
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This poem’s a bit long…but please bear!!
My dear friend,
I am feeling betrayed,
By a person I really trusted,
And on whom a favour I had entrusted.
Help me, it’s now or never,
If you have considered me as your friend ever…
Remember the promises you made,
The false assurances, the lies,
Only you can solve my problems,
Eliminate my crisis,
To help me meet the person I truly miss,
Tell me the reason for your betrayal,
When it was you, at first,
who had, shown your faith and approval,
Self-confidence, I think I have it,
But still, I am incomplete ,
without your support,
I expect from you, just a little bit.
You can prevent my heart from being smashed and crushed,
Do you care for an old pal,
Or are you another selfish brat,
Do you think of a friend around,
Who needs your help and co-operation,
To set his life in motion.
Sometimes, i curse myself,
Why did I fall in love with this girl,
The most gorgeous one I’ve ever met,
I know I have a very distant chance,
I wish I weren’t reserved and shy,
But with your help, I can at least give it a try,
I am a loser, I know,
That’s why i need your backing.
I can never be a great flirt,
But do you want my heart to get hurt,
Help me, it’s now or never,
If you have considered me your friend ever.
One meeting with her is all I expect,
This favour of yours I’ll never forget,
I need your support,
As I am feeling betrayed,
By a person I considered a true friend.
Help me, it’s now or never,
If you have considered me as your friend ever……
5 Comments
actually, i agree this is an immature piece of work…one of the reason for that would be..i have written this last june..when i was just beginning to write poems….i was not gonna publish it on the site as i feared that it’s not worthy enough..but just took a chance….i believe, life’s a continuous learning process and i’ll definitely try n improve….
Vishvnand Reply:
April 4th, 2009 at 1:08 pm
Ninad,
When one writes a poem, what he wants to convey is quite important, but how he conveys and what impression he wants to create about the subject in the mind of the reader is also equally important. One should be able to read and understand his own poem in the manner a reader who has not written the poem, would read it.
This thought came to me as I read your reply to the comments and please rest assured it is not meant to be a sermon.
i am an engineering student from mumbai and writing poetry is one of my hobbies...
“One meeting with her is all I expect,
This favour of yours I’ll never forget,”
If this is what is the expectation from this poem, I think the tone of the poem is very defective and will not achieve the desired objective. It is only blaming the friend and her, when the problem seems to be with the attitude of the person himself.
I may be wrong in my assessment but this is the feeling I got from reading the poem.
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purabi Reply:
March 30th, 2009 at 7:42 pm
seconding with vishvnand’ji…i guess you need to do a lot of reading to melt hard block of ice and avert the direction of the wind.this is a very immatured representation of a very intense feeling, called deception.wish you luck….
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