The Raging Fire
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Loading ...Your memory is like bellowing smoke from a raging fire
The heat still scalds me
The smoke hits me in the eye
The groans of my want drown in the whirlpool of my tears
Somebody lets out a wailing cry
Was it I?
I am sinking into the cupping kiss
My lips spit out in disgust
What a lie !
My lament rises over the mountains ,over the seas
Why? Even God should be able to hear me.
But
From You,The gods arose
From Your touch,thousands of streams shivered and moaned
From Your eyes,moonlight glows
From Your breath,all the roses wilted in shame
From Your kiss,molten lava flows
From Your embrace,forests were set aflame
From Your smile,peacocks broke into a dance
From Your laughter,bells forgot to tinkle
From Your glance,beings went into a trance
Alas !
You could not be mine
And you left behind
A living corpse
On whom flies and maggots claim
Their rightful share
My dreaded remains shrivel to see
You flowering in love’s ocean
Your singing surging the waves
Your contented eyes from nightlong embrace mocking me
Your happiness piercing me like a sting ray
I burn, I burn
And I become the raging fire
9 Comments
a lot could be heard from the enigmatic lines..very powerful poetry with words almost blurting out intense pain…
indeed u r a powerful poetess
The perfect eloquence of a woman’s emotions…
the mind angered.. the heart hurt…lamenting the lost…reminiscing the past…admitting the anguish…grudgingly accepting the present…
A complete work on the vulnerability, sensitiveness and sentimentalism of woman..every emotion captured and expressed in the most raw and realistic manner yet wrapped in poetic perfection…
A true depiction of the complex emotions of the most wonderful creation of God “The Woman”!!!
A masterpiece Renu!!…no less than that…
Hmmm…appealing stuff,this!some fantastic and original thoughts(smoke hits the eye,sting ray-how did you think that?brilliant!)overshadow some predictable thoughts(peacock,bells) to make the poem enjoyable.AND a surprise-i havent seen you deal with so many emotions in a poem.this one has it all-remorse,anger,nostalgia,jealousy…kinda ensures that the reader sympathises with the woman in the poem.i wish that the nostalgia part was dealt with a little more maturity-that part is simply dry sans any punches.
(+)-flows at a frantic pace
(-)-hmmm…uh.none in particular
P.s-sting ray kills(steve irvin,croc hunter).stay away.
I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
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wow…. beautiful metaphors….. the sweet memories and bitterness are leaping out.. sad and beautiful….
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