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Die !! You Monster !
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Loading ...Sadness had seeped in through his pores
Entrenched itself like a leech
Sucking the last vestiges of joy
It cascaded in waves
It hollowed his bones
It mocked the life, whatever was left in him
It drenched his senses
It crawled with multiple feet
And made a spiderweb in him
Trapping any joy that may have passed onto him
The seven headed serpent of depression hissed and danced
Laughing at the porous skeleton of his wants and desires
It sucked out his desire to live
It emptied his soul
It feasted on his remains
It toasted on his carcass
The sword cut into his flesh again and again
It delighted on sipping his droplets of blood….
Go back,you monster !!
From this moment,you flee !!
Ride on the wings of the wind and get blown away
We have swept away the cobwebs
We have uprooted your fangs
This is the house of a poet’s soul
Gentle and elevated
You cant soil it any more
You cant devour on it anymore
Move out,you snake
We will throw your carcass
And let the vultures feed on you
Smiling,we will see you disappear bit by bit.
12 Comments
whew!what a visual effect…lovely lines..
depression personified so well,detestation so well garnished
a treat as ever…
renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 10:10 am
@purabi, mutual admiration club 
love the imagery that your poems create too
What can I say,
Electric. ecstatic and an explosion of a magnificient kind,
from depth of despair to height of estacy captured in a beautiful poem.
Kudos to you for this creation. A very different one from you which all should read.
renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 10:11 am
@Vishvnand, Thanks VV ji – A poem is not complete without your comments !
that’s the kinda poetry i like…. especially when its written so beautifuly… i’d be soon out of business if u continue on such topics…lol.. just kiddin….
renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 6:26 pm
@aPOorV, hey -thanks Apoorv.Nah- you will never go out of business – just that we need to see more of you !
Reminded me of your last dark poem-the dark night.this one has to be one of your brightest works on p4p.for sure,everyone who has read renu rakheja’s work will pause while reading and think-ok hang on.is this the same poet?(Remember?,love thats so divine).i think you can really take dark poetry seriously n compete with the likes of inam garcia.versatility at its best.
(+)-excellent gory descriptions
(-)-none in particular(makin a habit of givin it to your poems).
renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 6:27 pm
@Shreyansh Sen Sharma, Thanks Shreyansh ! Great to see you coming to the site much more often
I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
http://renunrajsblog.blogspot.com/
Wow! Renu…this one’s Fantastic… very well conceived and beautifully portrayed…
What I liked was the poeticism (if I may use the word) did not complicate the expression and distract from the content..It was well depicted and packaged so aptly in a form with amazing visual effects which accentuated the thought / message…
A brilliant piece of work!
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renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 10:09 am
@Seema, Thanks.Love your feedback !
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