What Do I Cherish More???
Your kiss, your gaze or your breath
What do I cherish more?
Your breath that I breathed
Suffusing me to the core
Sanctifying me…..
Have kept it inside safely stored
Every breath that I breathe
Intermingles with it and roars
Ecstatic in its union
Electrifying me….
Keeping me alive.
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awesome…length works wonders,the poem is painfully short….and painfully beautiful!
(+)-hmm…everything.right from the flow to the display of ideas and the ending.
(-)-None in particular.
p.s-Carbon dioxide is bad for lungs :p
A very beautiful poem indeed.
Liked it immensely.
The feel & impact on reading the poem was also ecstatic, electrifying & sanctifying too.
wow! wat a thought!…full of romanticism…
mujhe generally bahtu kam logon ki hi romantic poems pasand aati hain… i feel ppl cant handle it well…swayam bhi shayad maine aaj tak ek hi romantic poem likhi hai… par aapki to har romantic poem mujhe bahut appeal karti hai… u are wonderful wen it comes to romancing with words nd thoughts in a romantic poem….
with regards
renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 10:15 am
@vartika, thanks vartika- yes ! we need to see more of romantic poems from you.you are the queen of despair right now
Awesome…
Every lover can relate to it.
It’s one of those which we can feel but sometimes are unable to pour it down it into words…
Loved it very much…
its really a great poem…..
are u in relative with tushar raheja??????????
please reply ……….
i’m waiting

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I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
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Wow! Every breath you take…Nice romantic and simple but soulful..
Also I really like the way you selectively rhyme some of your lines, kind of provides a nice flow…I must try that some time…
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renu rakheja Reply:
February 18th, 2009 at 10:13 am
@Seema, Do try that- it makes the poem more of a poetic dialogue rather than a structured piece
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