To India…On Republic day
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Twinkle Twinkle the world’s “shining” star
Look where u were and where u are…
Why has the brightness dulled as such?
A year that ravaged and hurt you so much?
What has angered and embittered your every son
Is the dastardly act of the coward’s gun….
The naked deceit of the professed “true” one
Has your image of success of years…undone
But why does the star shine bright no more?
Where did your strength….your conviction go?
Look up and soar into the sky
Shine again and rise very high…
The shattered sparkle don’t bemoan
We are all with you… you are not alone…
Shine again my little star
We need to go very far… we have to go very far!
48 Comments
@rajdeep, Thanks.. i hope the connotation of the “true one” came out clearly.. or is it a little too subtle?
True One – Satyam
rajdeep Reply:
January 25th, 2009 at 1:57 pm
@seema, na na its beautiful
really marvelous
superbly written
evokes passion
shows hope 
seema Reply:
January 25th, 2009 at 3:12 pm
@viju, Thanks…Like I said.. Never lose hope….
Seema, A beautiful Poem, indeed.
But why single out “Satyam” alone. In fact the sentence “The naked deceit of the professed “true” one” does cover in a way all those “Jekyll & Hyde”s, who are responsible for the downfalls, over the years.
I may suggest the following in its place.
“The treachery & deceit of the professed honest ones”
seema Reply:
January 25th, 2009 at 3:45 pm
@VishVnand, I appreciate your view point … but feel that the treachery & deceit of the professed “honest ones” was there , is there and will always be there in every country and in every economy… The satyam blow has been extremely untimely…of macabre proportions…and hit hard at an already shaken nation….definitely the hardest blow that corporate India has ever seen and therefore stands out as the biggest villain amongst the other “Jekyll and Hydes” and elicits the “pointing finger” in every aspect of the word!!……
VishVnand Reply:
January 25th, 2009 at 10:19 pm
@seema,
Yes, I think you are right on this score. Good.
Why speak of Satyam………hush hush………
Poem is truely good……My salutes………..
Stars = 100 * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
Great work seema…. .aint I tired of sayin that ?
seema Reply:
January 25th, 2009 at 11:24 pm
@Manish, LOL Thanks ..I would love to return the compliment …so lets see some poems from you…by the way… those essays of yours need to go through the shredder…LOL
A very good poem urging
every one “to go very far”
to achieve our goal.
seema Reply:
January 26th, 2009 at 11:57 am
@medhini, Thnak you Medhiniji…am glad you liked it.
Lovely poem and very nicely presented..loved the picture of the Taj Mahal
seema Reply:
January 26th, 2009 at 4:35 pm
@rupak, Wow! what an achievement to get u to not just read my poems but also to comment…thats what I call a good hubby… LOL
very nice poem seemaji
one of best…..
feel good….
seema Reply:
January 26th, 2009 at 10:44 pm
@dr.paliwal, Thank you..very much…
As I was standing in Gandhi Ji’s birthplace today watching Indian tiranga unfurl on republic day, your words make so much sense. Hope your poem lifts the spirit of all those feeling let down by events in recent past.
seema Reply:
January 27th, 2009 at 12:03 am
@prahbat, Thank you so much… always look forward to your comments…and India is obviously proud of people like you and your achievements….
How Nice…what a wonderful compliment….Thank you so much…and Thank you so much to take the trouble of reading and commenting on each of my poems..really appreciate.
What could be a more appropriate occasion , than this Diamond jubilee of Republic Day, to brood thoughtfully from the deepest deeps of the poetess’s heart , over the state of republic, which has the privilege of being the first republic of the world, The lichhhavis republic.
The deep concern of the poetess, the hurt expressed in her words , the anguish and the agony – is so emotive and moving to the very core of an Indian.Yet “Shine” – that is the hope, that is the light , the sine quo non of the Spirit of this nation – India, Bharat, Hindustan… never losing. never say die attitude.
Amidst,ravaged remains and hurt, the dastardly act of the coward’s gun – remains unmoved , unfettered and shines bright the resilience of ours; The naked deceit of the professed “true” one , can not belittle the spirit of honesty of we Indians – Hothon pe sachai rehti hai, jahan dil mein safai rehti hai, Hum us desh ke vaasi hain…
Having lit up the Light of republic and thus the equity in society…. more than 2500 years back….and having shone for so long we sure are to sign more glow more…truthfully Tamso ma jyotir gamaya !
seema Reply:
January 27th, 2009 at 10:37 pm
@Daring, Abhay..what a wonderful tribute to my poem and more importantly to the nation…really touching thoughts portrayed through such a fantastic spirit of patriotism..wish you had written them through a poem as well…Thanks..your comments always compliment my poems… or at times even outshine them totally…but thats the kind of reaction one really seeks..Thanks
To P4Poetry…..Its amazing what this one site has done to all of us…speaking for myself…this newfound love for writing Poetry changed the perspective of the last couple of days from a typical “long weekend” to “spirit of Republic day” albeit through words rather than actions… and then to a feeling of deep patriotism almost like a maternal instinct towards the country…the emotions reflected themselves through the poems words… and left a huge impact of wanting to do more…than just write.. for the country for the future generations and more importantly for one’s own inner self…this is the magic of this site and all the people who so beautifully responded to this poem and all other poems and help elicit and evoke such strong feelings in me. Thanks is too small a word for the same…
Vikash Reply:
January 28th, 2009 at 10:51 pm
@seema, thanks.
seema Reply:
January 28th, 2009 at 10:58 pm
@Vikash, Thanks Vikash..Is there any way we could put this for every one to access and read? considering everyone has already read this poem I dont think many would be able to see this. Really would love to share it with all.
Hi,
lemme join u on the Satyam thing, alabit late,
had not read the entire exchange earlier.
The satyam episode cannot, i feel be viewed in isolation, rather it is the cumilation of years of deciet, fraud, loot etal by our politicos, & its gotta be a hand in glove operation.
another scandel wud soon show up & satyam may be soon 4gotten 
seema Reply:
January 28th, 2009 at 11:06 am
@viju, Sad ….its definitely a system failure…but like i commented above to Vishvanandji …Satyam at the moment does stick out like the proverbial sore thumb!
You have touched upon some of the unfortunate events that unfolded last year with the audacity and sensitivity of a true poet. The poem lives up to being the baby of poetry.
Thanks
seema Reply:
January 29th, 2009 at 10:31 am
@Pramod Khilery, Thanks i loved the expression ‘baby of poetry”
Oh my God! How could I have missed that one? I think everyone has said all that I would have liked to say. But, hats off Seema, you aar too good. The way you mould your thoughts in words is outstanding. The motivational line : we have to go very far ” is perfect closing line. A masterpiece certainly.
seema Reply:
January 30th, 2009 at 3:14 pm
@parminder, Thanks Parminder.. this was a journey and not a poem…glad u finally saw it…Thanks.
Motivational, well-expressed, well-written…
This one really a “shining” star Seema ji… And ya, we need to go very far… we have to go very far! And will for sure beause here you are…
seema Reply:
January 30th, 2009 at 6:39 pm
@P4PoetryP4Praveen, Thanks you so much… yes we shall all go very far… and so shall our country!!Thanks
Hi Seema ji
Well written & it’s a very…very…very….very….very…good poem,really a very nice & motivational. I d’nt know, what i feel? but its feel my herat you are a great poerty! likhte rahiye……
seema Reply:
February 4th, 2009 at 11:20 am
@Ravi k Rajbhar, Thank you Ravi.. how very nice of you.. am glad this poem moved you…
Twinkle Twinkle the world’s “shining” star
nice poem
loved it
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