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Intense Moments (37-42)

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Crowned Poem, English Poetry

Can’t promise if they match up, but this would be a good poet’s block breaker (hopefully!)

37.

Twinkling sky as our roof

Moist field our bed, while
Our heat warmed the blanket

 

38.

Honey, build me a fire
For I want to feel warm inside
And the wine won’t help…..

 

39.

Laying there, breathing heavy
No talk, just realization-
Even heartless can make love

 

40.

The dark cocoa,
The bitter-sweet taste,
Was better on him

 

41.

Head in the crook of your arm

Eyes shut, breathing slowly…

In the comfort you give me

42. 

Uncertain arms and legs

Struggle over buttons and hooks

We reclaimed our territory

14 Comments

  1. vijay says:

    A blissful stste indeed 🙂

  2. VishVnand says:

    Preeti, this is fantastic. 5+ stars & shabbaas
    You call this “may be a poet’s block breaker!”, this is a dynamite, the block if any, is not only broken but blown off to pieces with explosion.
    Each 3 liner is exploding with intense meaning.
    For heaven’s sake, please don’t be too demanding on yourself. Just write what you feel and it will be intense. Give us the joy of reading your poems, continually without break.
    Do listen to my advice.

    • Preeti Datar says:

      @VishVnand, Vish ji (can i call you that?! It feels friendlier, though I hope to you it is not comign accross as being disrespectful) thanks for the egging on and the appreciation. I too think I’m being hard on myself, but being at the helm of p4poetry and paling in quality scares me 🙂 But I guess at the end of the day I’m just another poet. I shall keep your pointers in mind and write what comes to me naturally 🙂

      • VishVnand says:

        Preeti,
        Thank you very much for respecting me and also my advice.
        I am feeling so very happy about what you have written.

        btw, Let me explain my assumed name VishVnand

        My name is Vijayanand, wife’s name Vandana, Have a son, name Vishwaraj, a daughter name Nandini.
        I was known & popular in my professional career as “V V”
        So to cover & include everyone, I coined the name, “VishVnand” for p4poetry, with two capital V.
        Now Preeti, you can call and address me however you want and I know it will be very respectful.

  3. seema says:

    Hi Preeti..such few words that say so much…wow! wonderfully expressed…with passion and emotion…

  4. ULHAS says:

    Wow…….Really intense are they…..

    all stars for you…….the first one was the most intense….

    Stars = 5

  5. dr.paliwal says:

    Can’t promise if they match up, but this would be a good poet’s block breaker (hopefully!)

    Moist field our bed, while
    Our heat warmed the blanket

    Even heartless can make love

    very nice lines,

    magnificent expression of emotions in words

  6. rajdeep says:

    here comes the beautiful poem
    after a long time
    deserves a crown
    lovely

  7. medhini says:

    Simply beautiful. Vishvji had
    well commented. What more you
    want?

  8. medhini says:

    Simply beautiful. Vishvji had
    well commented. What more you
    want? Btw, you can compile and publish
    this series into a book form.I, myself don’t
    know how to go about it?

  9. parminder says:

    Wow ! Is the word that comes to mind. Fantastic 3 liners. And dear, being in the helm doesn’t make you super human. Relax and let it come naturally.

  10. vartika says:

    hey… i too agree with VishVnand ji …i guess d long season of waiting for ur posts is worth, just because though u write less, u write amazingly…i really liked d 37th, 39th nd 42nd.

    hope to get d honour of reading u more often frm now onwards… 🙂

  11. Mudit says:

    Beautiful..:)

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