एक प्रेमी की व्यथा…..!
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Loading ...This simple Hindi poem, composed as a situational Love Song, is a re-posting of my earlier poem “Premi Ki Vyathaa”, now with its podcast, song rendered with accompaniment on harmonium.
An upset & dejected lover is lonely, sitting on a sea-shore watching waves coming & going, caressing the rocks, which but remain unmoved/unaffected; and is reflecting on his own situation……!
एक प्रेमी की व्यथा…..!
लहरें आती है रूम झूम,
चट्टानों से प्यार जताने,
चट्टाने तो अटल खडी,
ना माने लहरों की बातें .
कैसे मानूँ मै तुम म्रदु हो,
जब तेरा दिल है पत्थर,
चट्टानों से बढ़कर,
चट्टाने तो थोड़ी घिस घिस जाती हैं,
तुझ पर तो कुछ असर नहीं होता…….!
थक गया हूँ अब प्यार में तेरे,
कभी तो करते याद मेरी,
दिन पर दिन यूं बीत गए,
कभी प्यार से तुमने बुलाया नहीं,
मुझे प्यार से कभी पुकारा नहीं……!
जाने कैसी ये महफिल है तेरी,
जिसमे दिल की कदर कुछ नहीं,
जैसे भंवरे कई हैं चमन में,
कली को न परख है किसीकी,
प्यार मेरा पहचानोगी,
ये आशा है बेकार मेरी,
दिन पर दिन यूं बीत गए,
कभी प्यार से तुमने बुलाया नहीं,
मुझे प्यार से कभी पुकारा नहीं……….!
थक गया हूँ अब प्यार में तेरे,
कभी तो करते याद मेरी,
दिन पर दिन यूं बीत गए,
कभी प्यार से तुमने बुलाया नहीं,
मुझे प्यार से कभी पुकारा नहीं……!
“VishVnand”
9 Comments
Very nice poem sir.
regards
sonal.
VishVnand Reply:
January 13th, 2009 at 8:46 pm
sonal,
Many thanks. Good to see you & your comments, back at p4poetry after quite a bit gap.
I am bad at hindi poems……but sir I thought I have read this poem of your before at P4P……I may be wrong…….
Anyways……This is a beautiful poem…..waves and rocks and the love & kiss between this..
Good poem
Stars = 4
VishVnand Reply:
January 13th, 2009 at 8:39 pm
ULHAS,
Thank you for your appreciation/comments and your remembering the song too. In the preamble I have stated that this is a re-posting of my earlier poem now with its fresh “podcast”. Were you able to listen to the podcast?
लहरें आती है रूम झूम,
चट्टानों से प्यार जताने,
चट्टाने तो अटल खडी,
ना माने लहरों की बातें .
Try changing as following:
लहरें आती है रूम झूम,
चट्टानों से प्यार जताने,
चट्टाने तो अटल खडी,
ना लहरों की बातें माने .
In most of your poems, if you make slight changes then they will give more impact. I think you should revise your poems multiple times to make it more consistent in meter and rhyme.
Retired senior engineering, marketing & operations management Executive with Passion for & deeply interested in reading & listening to all varieties of poetry & songs and in particular those rendered in Hindi/Hindustani. Also interested in & love reciting & rendering my own poems/compositions & songs on various subjects, composing tunes for songs and singing. Love to & adept at playing Harmonium as accompaniment to singing & also as accompaniment to others performing.
.......Location: Pune & Mumbai
A soothing serene voice singing a soulfull melody….A tranquilising impact! Thank you so much for this lovely gesture.
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VishVnand Reply:
January 13th, 2009 at 8:41 pm
Seema,
Thanks very much for your heartening comments. Looking forward always to your poems too.
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