इश्क:Aliteration5 Srang malichkar
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Loading ...इश्क का यू इसकदर इश्तेहार ना हो (E is repeated)
दिवानगीमे दोस्त दामन दागदार ना हो. (D is repeated)
हुस्नपरस्ती की हमेशा हया हो हद, (H is repeated)
इश्क का इल्म पे इख्तीयार ना हो . (E is repeated)
बातो बातो मे बात बदती है तो बदे, (B is repeated)
इश्क का इराद्तन इजहार ना हो . (E is repeated)
इबादत हो इन्सा इमानसे इतनी, (E is repeated)
बन्दगी का बन्दे बेवजा बाजार ना हो (B is repeated).
इश्क का यू इसकदर इश्तेहार ना हो . (E is repeated)
दिवानगीमे दोस्त दामन दागदार ना हो. (Dis repeated)
( इल्म- perception, )
12 Comments
Laudable effort and an outstanding outcome.
Liked the aliteration immensely as also the content of the poem. Excellent indeed.
Do tell us something more about yourself in your profile, if you don’t mind.
sarang malichkar Reply:
October 18th, 2008 at 3:01 pm
THANKS VISHVANAND,
I THINK THERE IS NOTHING TO SAY ANYTHING ABOUT MYSELF, BUT STILL I HAVE WRITTEN SOMETHING ABOUT MYSELF IN MY PROFILE. THANKS FOR FOLLOWING MY POETRY, I AM REALY THANKFUL TO YOU BECAUSE YOU ARE THE PERSON WHO ALWAYS TELL ME WHAT WENT WRONG AND WHAT WENT RIGHT WITH YOUR COMMENTS, THANKS AGAIN.
Fantastic poem. zabardast!
sarang malichkar Reply:
January 23rd, 2010 at 11:33 am
Thanks brij.
I am thankful to your commitment although I am so late to express.
Please rate the poetry, single star rating will be enough for me. I f possible please go through my other alliterations. I am eagerly expecting your remarks. Thank you.
Excellent ! This is so interesting and so well presented. Really enjoyed it.
sarang malichkar Reply:
January 23rd, 2010 at 11:29 am
Thanks Parmindar,
These days I was not following p4poetry even poetry itself. But your remarks are so encouraging, Thanks
Please rate the poetry, single star rating will be enough for me. I f possible please go through my other alliterations. I am eagerly expecting your remarks. Thank you.
When I was in school I came across 'Balish bahu bayakat badabadla' famous marathi poem, that alliteration inspired me, and I constructed a sentence "lali ne lalya ke ....." this was my very first poetry,As a remark I was punished by principal, It was famous for all wrong reasons which I can not reveal in this open forum, But the impact of that aliteration was owsome. I remember very few aliterations, and most of them are not quality. Therefore I request every body just try some aliterations, Let aliteration be added feature of P4poetry.
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बातो बातो मे बात बदती है तो बदे,
इश्क का इराद्तन इजहार ना हो .
bilkul sahi hai, sarang malichkar ji wah,
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sarang malichkar Reply:
October 18th, 2008 at 2:51 pm
THANKS, KALAWATI.
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