Dost: Gazal with aliteration Sarang Malichkar
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Aliteration (Anupras)
Dil diwana dostose danishta darkinar kyon na ho! (d is repeated)
Saapo ki sohbat me sapera samzdaar kyon na ho! (s is repeated)
Nuktachin nukhs hi nikalenge nashakhori ke , (N is repeated)
Mayse magar mijaj majedaar kyon na ho! (M is repeated)
Jafaa me jajabat-e-jiya jalaaye jo jana, (J is repeated)
Dhadakanoki dhadhak dhuwadaar kyon na ho! (Dha is repeated)
Gul se hi gulshan gulzaar ho gar, (G is repeated)
Khu-e-khar khatarnak khunkhar kyon na ho! (Kha is repeated)
Saaton samundar sahme sada sunkar meri, (s is repeated)
Aawaz na aaye to aah asardaar kyon na ho! (A is repeated)
Gar gujar gaye to galise gujarenge Gaahe gaahe, (G is repeated)
Deed ke diwane ko dilbar ke deedar kyon na ho! (D is repeated)
Dil diwana dostose danishta darkinar kyon na ho! (d is repeated)
Saapo ki sohbat me sapera samzdaar kyon na ho! (s is repeated)
( Nukhtachin -Critics samikshak, Khu-e-khar- kato ka mijaj, gaahe gahe- kabhi kabhi)26 Comments
good .keep it up.
sarang malichkar Reply:
October 18th, 2008 at 3:08 pm
Thanks Jugal,I am realy late to respond.
Thank u very much
I like the gazal. Your play the words is excellent,still you are briliantly pursueing such novel ideas.
Gul se hi gulshan gulzaar ho gar,
Khu-e-khar khatarnak khunkhar kyon na ho
very well said
बहुत खूबसूरत है इस कविता का अंदाज़ | क्षमा चाहती हूँ कि काफी वक्त से कुछ ख़ास पढ़ नहीं पा रही हूँ | शब्दों का अति सुन्दर प्रयोग है |
When I was in school I came across 'Balish bahu bayakat badabadla' famous marathi poem, that alliteration inspired me, and I constructed a sentence "lali ne lalya ke ....." this was my very first poetry,As a remark I was punished by principal, It was famous for all wrong reasons which I can not reveal in this open forum, But the impact of that aliteration was owsome. I remember very few aliterations, and most of them are not quality. Therefore I request every body just try some aliterations, Let aliteration be added feature of P4poetry.
By the way I am in insurance sector, For any Investment contact me it will make my work easy, that might help me to genetare some remarkable poetry.
This the best aliteration that i have read so far
until now i was knowing only
Khadak sing ke khadakne se khadakti hain khidkiyan,
chach ne chahi ko,
chanda chamke chamcha,(fana)
but this is the best
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sarang malichkar Reply:
October 18th, 2008 at 2:41 pm
SHUKRIYA
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