Dost: Gazal with aliteration

Gazal

Aliteration (Anupras)

Dil diwana dostose danishta darkinar kyon na ho!                                   (d is repeated)

Saapo ki sohbat me sapera samzdaar kyon na ho!                                   (s is repeated)

 

Nuktachin nukhs hi nikalenge nashakhori ke ,                                  (N is repeated)

Mayse magar mijaj majedaar kyon na ho!                                           (M is repeated)

Jafaa me jajabat-e-jiya jalaaye jo jana,                                               (J is repeated)

Dhadakanoki dhadhak dhuwadaar kyon na ho!                                  (Dha is repeated)

Gul se hi gulshan gulzaar ho gar,                                                       (G is repeated)

Khu-e-khar khatarnak khunkhar kyon na ho!                                  (Kha is repeated)

Saaton samundar sahme sada sunkar meri,                                     (s is repeated)

Aawaz na aaye to aah asardaar kyon na ho!                                   (A is repeated)

Gar gujar gaye to galise gujarenge Gaahe gaahe,                               (G is repeated)

Deed ke diwane ko dilbar ke deedar kyon na ho!                            (D is repeated)

 

Dil diwana dostose danishta darkinar kyon na ho!                                   (d is repeated)

Saapo ki sohbat me sapera samzdaar kyon na ho!                                   (s is repeated)

( Nukhtachin -Critics samikshak, Khu-e-khar- kato ka mijaj, gaahe gahe- kabhi kabhi)
Comments

This the best aliteration that i have read so far
until now i was knowing only
Khadak sing ke khadakne se khadakti hain khidkiyan,
chach ne chahi ko,
chanda chamke chamcha,(fana)

but this is the best

बहुत अच्छे पर अगर आपने देवनग्री में पोस्ट किया होता तो पढने में चार चान्द लग जाते

Really
How is it possible, just amazing.

Keep it up.

धन्यवाद रेनु,
अगलि बार मै जरुर प्रयास करुन्गा . फिलहाल मै तायपिन्ग कि प्रयास कर रहा हु.

देवनागिरी में लिखते तो और अच्छा होता, पर ग़ज़ल में अक्षरों के साथ जो खेले हो वह बाकई शानदार है.

good .keep it up.

I like the gazal. Your play the words is excellent,still you are briliantly pursueing such novel ideas.

Gul se hi gulshan gulzaar ho gar,
Khu-e-khar khatarnak khunkhar kyon na ho

very well said

Good work.

i read ur both aliterations, both are mind blowing, but iski baat hi alag hai.

I liked it too much keep going

Excellent word-play I am going to read your rest of poems right now.

Keep it up

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