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Last Train Home

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English Poetry

Written for Prompt 1 posted on the blog. Check out the prompt and the members poetic response to the prompt here – http://forum.p4poetry.com/topic.php?id=54

Trains pass me by
Windows show scenes
From life of others-
Perhaps mine;

Of what could have been
And what has been-
Now,
And in between

These distances
The visible wall
The fading light
The cold love
The harsh words;

It was all too much
To take
I needed to breathe
I needed a break.

So I ran away.

But I want to look
Through the window
At what I want from me
And what I want with you
A heart
A home
I dream
Of never being alone

But the windows are closed
The doors are jammed
The track is wonky
The train is packed
The whistles have been blown
The flags have fluttered

Alone I will roam
With no where to run
for I missed the last train,
Last train home.

(18 June, 2008)

13 Comments

  1. ulhas_kavle says:

    This last para is good

    “But the windows are closed
    The doors are jammed
    The track is wonky
    The train is packed
    The whistles have been blown
    The flags have fluttered

    Alone I will roam
    With no where to run
    for I missed the last train,
    Last train home.”

  2. ulhas_kavle says:

    can you see my poem….”look at life – 5 elements”

  3. Dipti says:

    you have a beautiful flow in the poem .. writing style captivates the reader.. v nice..

  4. गौरव says:

    two words that i have for this poem are…..

    realy nice

  5. VishVnand says:

    Preeti, indeed A very outstanding poem.
    profound imagination, description & movement.

  6. Apoorv says:

    a really touching poem…… fell in love with the ending…..

  7. innovative treatment of the topic…captivating..

  8. digvijay singh says:

    superb

  9. Dhruv maniar says:

    its an ok ok poem,i like your free verse style but cudve been better…….ull get better eventually……keep writing…….all da best

  10. manoj.mock says:

    when everyone agrees with you.

    it’s slightly scary, isn’t it?

  11. preeti datar says:

    ^ Thanks Manoj and Dhruv, we’re all here to help improve each other, right?!

    @ manoj, its not scary as long as you’re rooted to the ground!

  12. rajdeep bhattacharya says:

    good poem , i like your style,the blank verse,
    regards
    rajdeep

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