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Our languid walks in the fragrant garden
Sitting wrapped in each other under the gulmohur tree
With red flowers showering under the fading sun
Sitting till the sky was filled with stars
The garden is still there with its fragrance
The tree is still there with its blossoms
And you can hear faint murmurings of the night wrapped tree calling our names
Remember?
The sound of the mynah as if cooing our names
The sound of the water when we played skipping stones
The fire we lit in the chill of the night and its crackling flame
The rising heat as we melted in each other and our moans
The mynah still cries looking for us
The water is still waiting for our stones
And you can now hear a deathly silence wrapped in my voice
Remember?
How our hearts would be beating wildly in anticipation of our rendevous
How we would be breathless with our longest kiss ever
How we would hate the ticking time reminding that we had to bid adieu
How we would dream of the day when we would could live together forever
The time is still ticking by slowly
Now breathless taking the stairs
And the heart now wrapped in a deathly dust
20 Comments
Renu, this is a gem and you know it!
Rock on….
BTW nothign short of a five for the beautiful crafting, the emotions and ofcourse the sheer joy of getting to read an amazing poem!
you have presented the concept in an extremely pleasing way, this is indeed a very good poem, amongst the better ones on this site, but I feel that the concept has been used too much over centuries…
hey renu thanx in advance for the space to post inspirational poetry 
One more thing, is it possible to number the pages in this site, like a book or like when you search on google 20 numbers appear and clicking on them you can directly go to that page number
As if my heart engrossed in memorium of my own sweet-heart.
The expression is simple, sensuous, touching.
beautiful. makes u so nostalgic and rekindles lost fires also the last lines brings one back to stark realities.
So tranquill the oceans depth yet raging the swells of waves that captures moments such as times tick…..
This would discribe the talent you display within the
framework of thought
Very well done
Renu, I have heard you once at Delhi. Was this the poem you read. Yes I think so. Sensuous, pleasing, nicely brought out emotion that each of us would relate to immediately. Nice work.
wow!!! that poem had so much emotion flowing through it. it puts into words so beautifully the feeling of love. really loved it.
Renu, you have stamped with ink what every one who has ever loved, has gone through. It touches the right vein.
I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
Always rising ...wanting to go higher
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B-E-A-U-TIFUL!!!!……. possibly by far my most favourite poem here…. the romance…….the sensuality…… the sorrow…..the regret… the longing…. everything is just leaping out of the poem n creating a holographic image!!!
simply mind blowing!!
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